Recursive Process:

I would say most of the recursive writing was about 25 percent journeyman level and 75 percent advanced journeyman. The evidence I have for Journeyman is that my recursive writing was a lot of adding. Here is an example.

First Draft:

Final Draft:

As it can be seen I added a better introduction to my first body paragraph. This is a perfect example of an improvement in the paper. It introduces the topic of the paragraph better. The next piece of evidence is evidence for advanced journeyman.

First Draft:

Final Draft:

This is a great example of restructuring the end of the last paragraph. I completely changed the ideas to end of the paper by adding a valuable quote from Miller and Jurassic. The last piece of evidence is for between Master and Advanced Journeyman. That evidence is that I had little to no typos, errors, and sentence structure issues.

Integrating Ideas with those of others:

For integrating ideas from others I would say that I am at the advanced journeyman level. My first piece of evidence is

First Draft:

Final Draft:

This is a great example of integrating the ideas of peers. Kyle suggested that I start with a claim which is crucial and that is exactly what I did. I added a solid introduction claim. Another example of integrating ideas from peers is

After I read this comment I proceeded to add 4-8 different Miller and Jurassic quotes and also explained why they’re writings on the topic are so crucial to my argument. Another example of Advance Journeyman that I see is the connections I made between the peers and writing. It was suggested that I explain more and not add to many quotes. I took that criticism and it helped tremendously.

Active Reading:

I believe that my active reading is at about advanced journeyman. My annotations are insightful and are important for my thought process for writing my paper. Here is the first annotation

This annotation was asking a question on if the quote was trying to say that technology is good or bad in that certain situation. Here is another annotation

This annotation was explaining to myself that that quote was the best way to revise and is a note for when I write my paper. Here is another advanced journey level annotation

This was an annotation that was also a note about using this quote to explain that a famous writer was using a typewriter, which I figured makes it the best form for revising and this is part of my main idea for the paper. The final annotation is

This annotation was about reducing the workload for writers in an either good or bad way due to advancing technology.

Critique Others Work:

 I would say my critique of my peers work could have been better. I believe that I fall in the Journeyman level. An example of this is

I thought this was a thoughtful comment. I thought it would help a reader understand what he was exactly saying if she explained why she doesn’t feel confident in his papers if they were not revised. If she gave an example why it would help strengthen her argument. Another example of a journeyman level quote is

This was another example of a thoughtful thought. If he explained the part when he said “view your writing in a different perspective”. What perspective(s) could this be? If he explained different perspectives then it would help strengthen his argument. The last example I have is

If he threw in a quote after “time ago” then he would show evidence that there was no revising option. This would help strengthen his argument quite a bit.

MLA:

I would say that I fall somewhere between advanced journeyman and master. I use good source introductions. Here is an example

In this example I use a good introduction statement because I use the authors name and say what he is about to talk about.  Another example of good signalling at the master level is

This is another master level introduction statement because I again include the authors name and say he continues after his last thought. I also format the author correctly as seen in the same image above. I write the authors name and page number. Another master level thing in MLA is my work cited. Here is an example

I use correct MLA formatting in this with the sources being cited correctly.

Error Patterns:

I would say that I am between advanced journeyman and master level. I fix the errors needed and my final drafts are near perfect grammatically. Here is an example

This is a great example of a fixed grammatical error. Another example of a fixed error is this common splice runon

I fixed this error by using a semi colon. If one would look over my paper I believe that there would be little to no errors. This would put me in the master  level.