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  1. I need to add on for the paper. I mostly affirmed and connected points. I can make my paper better by adding to the ideas already said in the two writing pieces by Jurassic and Miller and also Craig Fehrman. My peers specifically said that I needed “to start your paragraph with a claim”. I agree with this because I don’t have the greatest paragraph structure. That is something I definitely need to work on. The biggest thing my peers wrote was that “use Jurassic and Miller quotes to back up claims”. This is the most helpful comment because  If I do that it will prove the points I am making.  Another consensus is that I need to make it more obvious when I connect texts and make a valid point about it and continue to explain the ideas.
  2. My peer think that I do not have enough introduction to Jurassic and Miller. I have almost none of that. I mostly focus on Fehrman’s article. I need to greatly improve that part of my paper so it can be explain my connections and strengthen my argument.

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