Month: April 2018

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1. I need to add on for the paper. I mostly affirmed and connected points. I can make my paper better by adding to the ideas already said in the two writing pieces by Jurassic and Miller and also Craig Fehrman. My peers specifically said that I needed “to start your paragraph with a claim”. I agree with this because I don’t have the greatest paragraph structure. That is something I definitely need to work on. The biggest thing my peers wrote was that “use Jurassic and Miller quotes to back up claims”. This is the most helpful comment because  If I do that it will prove the points I am making.  Another consensus is that I need to make it more obvious when I connect texts and make a valid point about it and continue to explain the ideas.
2. My peer think that I do not have enough introduction to Jurassic and Miller. I have almost none of that. I mostly focus on Fehrman’s article. I need to greatly improve that part of my paper so it can be explain my connections and strengthen my argument.

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But thinking is a thinking that is a critical thinking. Examples of this are when authors write a paragraph that is against something that is requires critical thinking. If an author were to say “This article has good evidence due to a, b, and c, but d, e, g.

And thinking is adding on to something already written. Examples of this is when authors write a paragraph that is continuing on a point already made. For example, if an author were to say “This article has a great support of evidence and more can be added to strengthen the argument.

I questioned why Gay seems to not show both sides of an arguement.

I made a comment that she doesn’t understand taking about her car to a mechanic because she is not in the discourse.

I am challenging that her statement would be disagreed with by a lot of people.

1. Gay shows that essential feminism doesn’t let people be individuals when Gay talks about how to fit into essential feminism you have to follow a specific kind of way of doing it which is where a lot of stereotypes come from. Also Gay states that it is a discourse which is very specific to the criteria of action.

3. Gay shows how the equaility movement to make men and women equal is put on the shoulders of all feminism when she talks about how it takes a lot of people to fight a movement and if you are you have a lot of responsibility when you do it because it a very important fight that is taking place.