Part 1

I mostly affirmed in the first draft. My peers believe I could challenge a specific point. I affirmed that what Alexander says is true.  Alexander says that hero and success are two different narratives and need to be separate. My peers are saying I can challenge Williams idea of a hero because Williams in a way puts hero and success narratives together. This is against what I am affirming. I could definitely challenge this because Williams breaks down literacy narratives and never mentioned a success narrative. Williams says “In these narratives it is the traditional individualistic heroic attributes–perseverance, self-reliance, self-confidence–that allow them to triumph” (Williams).  I am not going to challenge this definition of hero, but I am challenging the idea that Williams doesn’t mention success narrative as a narrative.

Part 2

My introduction have at least one sentence of scholar writing. An example is I use Alexander’s writing to explain my point of the paper and my point of view.  An example of this is “An example of a distinction is best said by Kara Poe Alexander in Successes, Victims, and Prodigies: “Master” and “Little” Cultural Narratives in the Literacy Narrative Genre, when she describes the hero she says, “emphasizes individual, rather than literacy”(Alexander 615). In contrast to that Alexander described a success narrative as “emphasizes literacy, rather than individual”(Alexander 615). ”  I am going to edit that introduction a little bit because I do not think it flows as well as it could. 

Part 3

I need to introduce and explain the quotes I am putting in better. In many cases I only give a little context. I need to add a couple of sentences  of context so the reader understands where these quotes are coming from.  If I do so It will make my paper be as clear as possible. There are examples where I do have good context, an example of this “She stated ‘I would constantly earn a ‘C’ on all of my ACF papers'(Davis). She turned it around and then exclaimed” this is an example of how I gave quote good context. I need to do more of that.

Part 4

I found some parts of Williams that we did not read that help prove my point. I am going to use when Williams was speaking on a hero and included a part of what Alexander said about success narratives. I am going to challenge this because my point is hero narratives and success narratives are completely different and should not overlap. If Williams is putting them together then I need to challenge this and prove Williams wrong. I will do this by using the Rising Carin narratives and Alexander and show how they are different.

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