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1. I need to add on for the paper. I mostly affirmed and connected points. I can make my paper better by adding to the ideas already said in the two writing pieces by Jurassic and Miller and also Craig Fehrman. My peers specifically said that I needed “to start your paragraph with a claim”. I agree with this because I don’t have the greatest paragraph structure. That is something I definitely need to work on. The biggest thing my peers wrote was that “use Jurassic and Miller quotes to back up claims”. This is the most helpful comment because  If I do that it will prove the points I am making.  Another consensus is that I need to make it more obvious when I connect texts and make a valid point about it and continue to explain the ideas.
2. My peer think that I do not have enough introduction to Jurassic and Miller. I have almost none of that. I mostly focus on Fehrman’s article. I need to greatly improve that part of my paper so it can be explain my connections and strengthen my argument.

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But thinking is a thinking that is a critical thinking. Examples of this are when authors write a paragraph that is against something that is requires critical thinking. If an author were to say “This article has good evidence due to a, b, and c, but d, e, g.

And thinking is adding on to something already written. Examples of this is when authors write a paragraph that is continuing on a point already made. For example, if an author were to say “This article has a great support of evidence and more can be added to strengthen the argument.

I questioned why Gay seems to not show both sides of an arguement.

I made a comment that she doesn’t understand taking about her car to a mechanic because she is not in the discourse.

I am challenging that her statement would be disagreed with by a lot of people.

1. Gay shows that essential feminism doesn’t let people be individuals when Gay talks about how to fit into essential feminism you have to follow a specific kind of way of doing it which is where a lot of stereotypes come from. Also Gay states that it is a discourse which is very specific to the criteria of action.

3. Gay shows how the equaility movement to make men and women equal is put on the shoulders of all feminism when she talks about how it takes a lot of people to fight a movement and if you are you have a lot of responsibility when you do it because it a very important fight that is taking place.

“emphasizes individual, rather than literacy”(Alexander 615).

“emphasizes literacy, rather than individual”(Alexander 615).

distinct hero narrative and not a success narrative is Goddu says:

 I would be sick for weeks at a time. A result from this is I would miss school, and this would cause me to have        anxiety attacks that would keep me out of school longer. I would just miss so much school. In the sixth, seventh, and eighth grade I missed over forty days each year. That’s a lot of time to be missing school. It got the point that teachers would send me lesson plans through email and I would have to self teach myself. But the thing is I managed to get through it. I passed all three of those years with honor roll and I made it high school(Goddu). 

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“emphasizes individual, rather than literacy…establishes self as hero of literacy story”(Alexander 615).

“I would constantly earn a ‘C’ on all of my ACF papers”(Davis).

“I did gain an extra sense of confidence in my work too”(Davis).

“These researchers have also shown how powerful this heroic identity is for students who consider themselves to be successful writers. In these narratives it is the traditional individualistic heroic attributes–perseverance, self-reliance, self-confidence–that allow them to triumph”(Williams 343).

“checked it out through her and then the rest was history. That was the first of many that I read. I was surprised to see myself thoroughly enjoying something that I had just assumed I hated”(Marcelino).

“views literacy as utilitarian and useful”(Alexander 615).

“Books were a motivation to get an achievement. Even if I did not like it, it was still an accomplishment to get it done”(Shine).

“Ben had a lot of trouble with the past and present words, so I came in to help him with that…My brother now looks at me like his role model and does a lot of the things I always liked to do.”(Geistikh).

“they do so by generalizing about literacy and its power of pointing to future success”(Alexander 617).

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Part 1

I mostly affirmed in the first draft. My peers believe I could challenge a specific point. I affirmed that what Alexander says is true.  Alexander says that hero and success are two different narratives and need to be separate. My peers are saying I can challenge Williams idea of a hero because Williams in a way puts hero and success narratives together. This is against what I am affirming. I could definitely challenge this because Williams breaks down literacy narratives and never mentioned a success narrative. Williams says “In these narratives it is the traditional individualistic heroic attributes–perseverance, self-reliance, self-confidence–that allow them to triumph” (Williams).  I am not going to challenge this definition of hero, but I am challenging the idea that Williams doesn’t mention success narrative as a narrative.

Part 2

My introduction have at least one sentence of scholar writing. An example is I use Alexander’s writing to explain my point of the paper and my point of view.  An example of this is “An example of a distinction is best said by Kara Poe Alexander in Successes, Victims, and Prodigies: “Master” and “Little” Cultural Narratives in the Literacy Narrative Genre, when she describes the hero she says, “emphasizes individual, rather than literacy”(Alexander 615). In contrast to that Alexander described a success narrative as “emphasizes literacy, rather than individual”(Alexander 615). ”  I am going to edit that introduction a little bit because I do not think it flows as well as it could. 

Part 3

I need to introduce and explain the quotes I am putting in better. In many cases I only give a little context. I need to add a couple of sentences  of context so the reader understands where these quotes are coming from.  If I do so It will make my paper be as clear as possible. There are examples where I do have good context, an example of this “She stated ‘I would constantly earn a ‘C’ on all of my ACF papers'(Davis). She turned it around and then exclaimed” this is an example of how I gave quote good context. I need to do more of that.

Part 4

I found some parts of Williams that we did not read that help prove my point. I am going to use when Williams was speaking on a hero and included a part of what Alexander said about success narratives. I am going to challenge this because my point is hero narratives and success narratives are completely different and should not overlap. If Williams is putting them together then I need to challenge this and prove Williams wrong. I will do this by using the Rising Carin narratives and Alexander and show how they are different.

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Ideas

The biggest “tag” that stuck out to me was the tag in Alexander’s piece was the outsider tag because that is how I felt before I really enjoyed reading a book for the first time. Another great idea for a “tag” is developed from Brandt when he states “This essay does not presume to overcome the analytical failure completely”. The Failure may be a tag I use. This is because success has never came without failure. These are the tags I would use.

Annotaions

This annotation is a challenge on your only knowledge being judged off school alone. It is not true because of testing outside of school.

This annotation is an understanding on a main point about if the writing  of analytics.

The growth mindset has helped me turn my psychology grade around. It was a “U” and now I currently have an 80 in the course. It has also helped me increase all of my classes by at least 5 points. This is because I convinced myself I need to do better and I can. It has also helped me in English because I have a can do attitude about writing the papers. The papers have gotten much better since the beginning of the course. It also helped me become a more scheduled and structured student who knows how to manage time better.

This was a cool website with a lot of creative posts.

My plan is to have a picture of me and my family and have tabs of my football career and my fiend group. After that I would have a showing of the different work I have done of over the summer. The football career would be the different things through my football career. It would be about teammates and coaches. The friends would be the cool stuff I have done with my friends.